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I wrote a paper on depression in teens and it needs to be a eidtorial paper. I have no idea how to a write a editorial paper! can anyone fix it for me and make it an editorial paper!
thanks !

Being depressed not only affects the person being depressed but everyone who loves and cares about that person. Depression can lead to suicide. Suicide is the third leading cause of death for people aged 15 to 24. the most common reasons teens commit suicide is because they can’t get over their depression, alcohol abuse, drug abuse, or physical or verbal abuse by someone who they love or care about.
Teen’s depression is a psychological condition that affects your feelings, behaviors and thoughts according to the center for young women’s health. Some symptoms of depression are you might not want to do anything, think things won’t get better, can’t concentrate or make your own decisions. Also depression can destroy the very essence of a teens personality causing an over whelming sense of despair, stress, anger or sadness.
unlike adults who most likely have the ability to seek assistance on their own. Teenagers usually must rely on relatives, parents or others to see their suffering and to get them the treatment they need to survive. One of every eight teenagers is depressed. Also affecting 17 million Americans and more then 100 million people each year. Also teen boys might not turn their depression into dangerous or violent behavior, nor to teen girls might they develop anorexia nervosa, a life, threatening eating disorder.

Have you ever known someone who was depressed? If you think might have known or currently know someone, you might want to look out for these signs. the most common signs of depression in teens are lack of interest or pleasure in daily things, severe weight loss or weight gain, less sleeping or excessive sleeping, loss of energy, feelings of worthlessness or guilt, difficulty in making choices, restlessness, stress, loss, trauma, anxiety, substance abuse, crying, anger, hopelessness, negativity, social isolation, talk of running away or efforts to, and thoughts or efforts to commit suicide.
Depression is a mental illness, and can be diagnosed and treated. it is characterized by a profound or constant feeling of sadness, despair and/or a loss of interest in things one once liked. Everyone gets sad to upset every once in awhile but when feelings of sadness become to overcome everyday life and activities, that’s when it becomes serious. Major depressive disorders can last from two or more weeks if not months or years.
there are ways to treat this. One way is therapy. when you go to therapy, you usually go once or twice a week depending on how bad you are, and you just sit and talk to a licensed therapist for an hour or two. the therapist helps them become aware of their patterns of thinking and how they become this way. another way is antidepressants. these pills are supposed to help you be happier but from records, antidepressants have actually increased the suicide risk.

As you can see, depression is a very serious disorder and needs to be known. Depression is not a thing that can just go away without getting help. Parents of depressed children need to know that they need to be calm with their children and help them get through this. I hope people become more aware of the effects of depression in teens.

An editorial is basically an authors own opinion on a discussed topic. In your case, this editorial would be an expression of your beliefs and thoughts about teen depression. This article is very well organized, so you do not have to worry about MAJOR reformations. I do have one piece of advice, though.
it would be beneficial to use a more diverse vocabulary. Meaning, instead of repeating a word a vast amount of times, replace it with a synonym of any sorts. This keeps the reader actively interested in what you have to say, and it creates that "page-turning" effect, if you know what I mean. the only word I see that has quite a bit of redundancy is "depression". maybe you can consider the use of other words such as "despondency" or "severe melancholy"?
overall, this is a well-written work with a strong, satisfying conclusion. I've actually learned a lot of interesting facts about depression from reading this, so thank you for sharing this editorial as well!

looks good as long as you have an introduction, at least 3 main idea paragraph supported with detail and facts and contain transition words, and a conclusion that reconnects to the topic that ends with a strong statement. you should be good.

transtions words:

for example, for instance, on the other hand,...

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